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How to Show, Not Tell in Writing: 8 Examples Every Writer Should Master

  • Jul 23
  • 5 min read

If you've spent any time learning the craft of writing, you've almost certainly heard the phrase:


"Show, don't tell."


It's repeated in writing books, creative writing classes, and online forums so often that it's practically become a slogan.


There's just one problem.


Very few people actually explain what it means.


Many new writers come away believing they're never allowed to simply state an emotion. Others swing too far in the opposite direction, describing every blink, every breath, and every movement until their prose becomes exhausting.


The truth is much simpler.


Showing isn't about making your writing longer. It's about making your readers feel what your characters are experiencing.


Think about your favorite novel.


When the hero loses someone they love, the author probably doesn't just tell you they were sad. Instead, you experience that sadness through their actions, their dialogue, and the silence that follows.


Showing transforms readers from observers into participants.


Instead of reading about a story, they begin living inside it.


That doesn't mean telling is bad. Great authors tell all the time. They summarize travel, skip unimportant moments, and move quickly through scenes that don't deserve much attention.


The secret is knowing when to show and when to tell.


Let's look at eight examples that demonstrate the difference.


1. Fear


Tell


Emma was terrified.


Show


Emma's fingers tightened around the flashlight until her knuckles turned white. Every creak of the old house made her heart slam against her ribs. She held her breath as footsteps echoed somewhere upstairs.


Notice how the second example never uses the word terrified.


Instead, readers recognize the emotion through physical reactions.


Fear often shows itself through shallow breathing, trembling hands, widened eyes, frozen movements, racing thoughts, or hesitation. Readers instinctively recognize these signs because they've experienced them themselves.


When readers identify the emotion on their own, it feels far more real.


2. Anger


Tell


Marcus was angry.


Show


Marcus shoved his chair backward so hard it scraped across the floor. His jaw tightened as he crumpled the letter into a ball before throwing it across the room.


Anger isn't just shouting.


Sometimes it's silence.


Sometimes it's clenched fists.


Sometimes it's speaking through gritted teeth.


The mistake many writers make is assuming every angry character yells. In reality, quiet anger can often be far more intimidating than loud anger.


Ask yourself:


How does this particular character express anger?


Someone patient may become unusually quiet.


Someone impulsive may explode immediately.


Showing personality while showing emotion creates much richer characters.


3. Love


Tell


Oliver loved his little sister.


Show


Oliver quietly slid the last piece of cake onto his sister's plate before pretending he wasn't hungry.


Love is one of the easiest emotions to show because it appears in small acts.


Holding someone's hand.


Remembering their favorite snack.


Walking on the dangerous side of the sidewalk.


Waiting until they get home safely.


These tiny moments often communicate love far more effectively than repeatedly telling readers how much two characters care about each other.


Sometimes actions really do speak louder than words.


4. Sadness


Tell


Sophia felt heartbroken.


Show


Sophia sat on the edge of the bed, turning the old photograph over in her hands. She smiled for just a second before quietly slipping it back into the drawer and closing it.


Sadness doesn't always involve crying.


Some people laugh.


Some become unusually quiet.


Others keep themselves busy because stopping would force them to feel.


Showing grief through meaningful actions often creates far more emotional impact than describing tears alone.


Readers remember quiet heartbreak because it feels authentic.


5. Confidence


Tell


The knight was confident.


Show


Without hesitation, the knight pushed open the castle doors and strode into the throne room, meeting every gaze without looking away.


Confidence often appears in body language.


Confident characters don't constantly seek approval.


They make decisions.


They maintain eye contact.


They speak clearly.


They move with purpose.


Showing confidence through behavior makes the character feel naturally self-assured instead of simply being labeled that way.


6. Nervousness


Tell


Ella was nervous about the interview.


Show


Ella straightened her jacket for the fourth time and rehearsed her introduction under her breath as she waited outside the office door.


Nervousness often reveals itself through repetitive behaviors.


Checking your watch.


Biting your nails.


Fidgeting.


Talking too much.


Talking too little.


These details allow readers to recognize anxiety without ever naming it.


The best part?


Different characters will display nervousness in completely different ways, making each one feel unique.


7. Happiness


Tell


Ben was happy.


Show


Ben practically skipped down the sidewalk, waving at strangers and humming the same tune all the way home.


Happiness is surprisingly difficult to write because many writers rely on smiling.


Everyone smiles.


Instead, think bigger.


Maybe your character whistles while making breakfast.


Maybe they finally dance around the kitchen.


Maybe they notice how beautiful the sunset looks.


Happy people often interact differently with the world around them.


That's what readers remember.


8. Jealousy


Tell


Lena felt jealous of her friend's success.


Show


Lena forced a smile as everyone congratulated Mia. She clapped politely, but later that evening she shoved the award announcement into the bottom drawer of her desk where she wouldn't have to see it again.


Jealousy is one of the most interesting emotions because people rarely admit they're feeling it.


Instead, it appears through subtle actions.


Forced compliments.


Passive-aggressive comments.


Avoiding someone.


Comparing themselves to others.


Trying to downplay another person's achievement.


These behaviors create much more believable characters than simply saying someone was jealous.


When Telling Is Actually Better


Here's something many writing teachers forget to mention.


Sometimes telling is exactly the right choice.


Imagine writing this:


Sarah reached toward the polished brass doorknob. Her fingers wrapped around the cool metal. She twisted it slowly until the latch clicked. She pulled the heavy wooden door open and stepped through.


Nothing important happened.


Simply writing...


Sarah opened the door.


...is much better.


Showing should be reserved for moments that deserve attention.


Important conversations.


Powerful emotions.


Life-changing decisions.


Major conflicts.


If you show every tiny detail, readers won't know which moments truly matter.


Contrast is what gives showing its power.


A Simple Trick Every Writer Can Use


Whenever you're editing your manuscript, look for sentences like these:


He was angry.

She felt scared.

They were excited.

He was embarrassed.


Now ask yourself one question:


Can my reader discover this emotion without me telling them?


If the answer is yes, rewrite the sentence using actions, dialogue, body language, or sensory details.


Not every sentence needs this treatment.


But the important ones usually do.


Over time, this habit becomes second nature.


You'll naturally begin writing scenes that readers don't simply understand.


They experience them.


Final Thoughts


"Show, don't tell" isn't about following a rigid rule.


It's about inviting readers into the emotional world of your story.


Telling informs.


Showing immerses.


The best writers know how to balance both.


They tell readers what isn't important.


They show readers what they'll never forget.


The next time you're editing your manuscript, don't ask yourself, "Am I showing enough?"


Instead, ask a better question:


"Do I want my reader to know this emotion... or do I want them to feel it?"


That single question can transform ordinary writing into unforgettable storytelling.

 
 
 

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